Thursday, March 3, 2011


Author's Note: This is an open poem on the sunrise.  I am working on not adding in be-verbs.  This is just a fun poem and I'm trying to be descriptive as usual.

The glowing stars and moon fades away
Dark blue and clouds swirl overhead
Six in the morning
Sun rises above the horizon
Wispy clouds fill the sky
Above the clouds a colorful scene
Birds chirp peacefully
The sun getting higher
Light blue skies coming over
The warm sun shining down from above


  1. Your poems are a real reflection of you. They are sweet, gentle, and take details of the surroundings into account. That's a lovely thing when it happens. We need to be ourselves when we write, to own our personal views and ideas. You do that so well, and so boldly. While you write that this was only for fun, I think it feels like more to me than just that.

  2. I really like how well you described a sunset and I felt if I close my eyes that I am actually there. Keep up on good word choice. The only thing I would say would be to keep in the same tense for everything, but other than that it was really good.